Discussion in 'Lets talk Business!' started by Mikey P, Dec 18, 2017.
Please link me here or send me a PM, I'd like to see your verbiage as I'm working on ours..
Bob is 6-2 eyes of blue and can swing a wand all day long. Loves to clean carpet, hates upholstery cleaning, and in his spare time watch’s my little pony.
Bob hopes one day to find the
Pony of dreams and settle down.
Wish Bob luck.
Nothing too special....
Just a little bit about each of us...
And now, we have to change up with Austin gone....
Sam for the win
Edits welcome'd if you're not an asshole about it
Our second-generation lead technician. We’re not sure what generates more thank you phone calls, Davis’ charm and patience or his hard work and dedication to doing the best job possible. Being born into the trade, even at his young age there is hardly a situation that Davis has not dealt with before many times when it comes to cleaning carpet, tile and upholstery. Just don’t bring up the subject of Hockey or Bulldogs or you’ll never get him to leave.
Ely has been a friend of our family since he was a tot so his fit in our company was a natural. Ely’s friendly smile and go to attitude quickly earned him the trust of our long list of repeat customers. Ely’s detailed cleaning skills are unmatched in Santa Cruz County, Davis and Mike included. He handles our largest and most prestigious clients with ease and style. This Soquel Native spends his free time riding dirt and mountain bikes, playing the drums and saving kittens stranded in tall trees.
Mike and Paula’s 1st born child, Monique took over running the office of both of our locations in 2012, Handling the phones, scheduling, book keeping for both locations, social media and making sure Mike and the guys combs their hair every day. “Mika” is well versed in our industry and you’ll enjoy her ability to explain our cleaning processes or spotting advice. Monique lives in Redding Ca with her boyfriend Sardi, two pugs and 4 cats and is becoming quite the talented Vegan chef.
Javier wins our fastest learner award by a land slide. What takes most humans months if not years to master, Javier has the amazing ability to conquer in just a few minutes. (we think he may be from another planet) Super polite, extremely hard working and a true pleasure to have on our staff and in our clients homes. A devoted husband and father of two, be sure to ask to see a photo of his youngest child, then stand back and watch his loving pride glow!
We originally hired Steve to primarily work on and maintain our equipment but his love for customer service and our cleaning process has him on the truck running routes with the guys most day. While is mechanical aptitude is wonderful to have around, his passion for cleaning is even more so. Stephan as also worked at both rug washing facilities in town so feel free to have him inspect your fine rugs to see if they could use some loving. Like all of our crew, a life time Santa Cruzer!
Other then spell check and grammar, how about some pictures.
I think the pictures do the justice of the whole idea.
I just paid a photograph to do a shoot at a customers nice home with my 2 new trucks and some interesting group shots.
I also got some waist up shots I want to do the same ....
This was a good exercise for me, as my "Type A Personality" usually dislikes anything resembling getting to know people at a personal level.
I liked the way you promoted their skills by mixing in their personality and interests, so that it didn't come off as being "over the top" and insincere. You didn't hide your relationship with Davis and Monique, but neither did you show any favoritism.
In a world full of fear and suspicion when it comes to those who enter our home, you make the reader feel safe.
I like them Mikey @Mikey P
I think a pic of them (which you probably have in mind) will really help fit the bill.
But honestly, I enjoyed reading about the crew.
What I was trying to imagine would be what my father would have written about me when I was Davis' age.
....It wouldn't have been nearly so glowing. It still wouldn't be
Photos will be included
I guess it's time to update ours.....since we've had some changes in our family structure....
I'll be putting that on the 2018 To Do list!
Only thing I probably would reword a little? maybe? is basically telling your customers in Ely's profile that he is better than all.
You want your customers to know they are getting equally talented technicians whoever performs the work for them.
Works for communism.
Well done - I've seen and read a lot of staff bios and they're all usually dull and boring. You did the opposite and made it exciting to learn about them.
What's that? A dating site?
Nice picture of you!
Can I get one autographed?
Very nice Bryan!
In Monique's you speak 2nd and 3rd person. Monique is Mike and Paula's child then you say our company.
Say Monique is our child or use the business name not our.
I didn't read all of it but saw that.