Critique Mike's site - earn credits

[FB19087]

http://carsonvalleyone.siwesy.net/


Things we are aware of:
Phone number small in header
buttons get hidden on some mobile devices
seo (meta,page name,alt text, etc)
yelp widget dimensions
images too heavy
a few other things but we will give credit for them

100 credits per spelling or grammar error

250 credits for display error (f'd up on mobile) if it includes a screenshot

1000 credits for any super awesome idea we end up using



*this is a draft....not the live site


*****I will tally, award, and list points earned tomorrow****

 

[FB19087]

@Mikey P

 

[Scott S.]

cool, that's a great idea. And get his ranking up really quick with all the views. Great idea @anon

 

[D Luke]

 

[FB19087]

its a draft that lives on my site.........even if views from here made a difference............the site isn't meant to be ranked and carries a noindex tag

 

[FB19087]

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buttons get hidden on some mobile devices?

I'll add the credits...but that is what I meant

 

[Scott S.]

its a draft that lives on my site.........even if views from here made a difference............the site isn't meant to be ranked and carries a noindex tag

oh, darn. I really did think if it was live that it would be a great builder for ranking.

 

[Derek]

Carpet, Tile, and Upholstery Cleaning

remove the 2nd comma.

 

[Mikey P]

a smile would be nice in your avatar.

 

[Lee Stockwell]

Make the State field default to Nevada.

 

[Derek]

We take pride in providing great one on one personal service as well as cleaning results

consider editing it to: one-on-one

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2nd review on 1st page: Almost impossible for me to give a 5 star rating, but Mike and his employee were truly amazing and I could not be any happier!!After 6 months

needs a space between the ! and the word After

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same review: I was also going to get rid of a large sectional couch but decided to see Mike could do

consider editing it to: but decided to see what Mike could do

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the last 3 sentences in the Meet Mike and Paula section, consider pressing Enter again after each to make them separate paragraphs, or else make them all 1 paragraph.

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Meet Mike and Paula

 

[Derek]

in the Our Service Area section on page 1, consider a capital C and a capital U: Connoisseur Carpet Cleaning provides the best in Carpet, Tile, and Upholstery cleaning to the following areas:

 

[Scott S.]

Should the pic be in the middle of the sentance or between two?

 

[Mikey P]

editing customer's real reviews could be a violation of the FCC...

 

[Scott S.]

There is a big space after each subject, in between the text and the learn more button. On each subject

 

[Scott S.]

Fabric protection area loaded in differant language, but if i scroll up the rest is in english.

 

[Scott S.]

 

[FB19087]

a smile would be nice in your avatar.

I was smiling in yesterday's avatar

 

[FB19087]

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dummy text...not mistake

 

[Lee Stockwell]

Filler Scott.

 

[FB19087]

Carpet, Tile, and Upholstery Cleaning

remove the 2nd comma.

http://www.getitwriteonline.com/archive/052709serialcomma.htm

 

[Kellie Hiler]

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Capitalize the first letters of the number list.

 

[Scott S.]

dummy text...not mistake

ok, no problem, thought you were looking for mistakes on mobile and web. Thought that the website was done for both, desktop site looks good and has english.

 

[FB19087]

ok, no problem, thought you were looking for mistakes on mobile and web. Thought that the website was done for both, desktop site looks good and has english.

I am...that is not a mistake....it is dummy text....and is also in place on the desktop view under fabric protector until mike sends me the text we are using

 

[Hoody]

Learn more button for fabric protection isn't working on homepage.

 

[Zee]

It's gotta be heaps of fun -for you Fred- to get critique from members here that regularly exhibit 1st grade English grammar and spelling.

Yeah..including the dumbass foooreigners.

 

[Onfire_02_01]

Carpet, Tile, and Upholstery Cleaning

remove the 2nd comma.

Two commas are correct in this instance. the comma is meant to separate three unlike things from each other. If you would remove the second comma it would indicate that Tile and Upholstery are cleaned together and Carpet is a separate thing. Ie. Carpet, tile grout, and upholstery; Carpet, tile, grout, and upholstery; Carpet, tile and grout, and upholstery. In the first one it is tile gout being cleaned where as in the second one tile is cleaned separately from grout and in the third one tile and grout are being cleaned together while the rest are being cleaned separately.

And yes I know the second comma is being removed in popular speech these days but having the second comma is grammatically correct.

 

[FB19087]

Learn more button for fabric protection isn't working on homepage.

fixed

 

[WillS]

Run on sentence...


With our ability to use various extractors, scrubbers and modern safe cleaning solutions, there is no need to over use water pressure or strong solvents, so slow drying and stiff or sticky carpeting is a thing of the past.

Recommended by WillS:

With our ability to use various extractors, scrubbers and modern safe cleaning solutions, there is no need to over use water pressure or strong solvents. Now slow drying and stiff or sticky carpeting is a thing of the past.

Or get rid of the now and so and just put "Slow drying and stiff or sticky carpeting is a thing of the past."

Under the About Us Page:

"started their own business in Santa Cruz Ca in 2001." should be "started their own business in Santa Cruz, CA in 2001."

Contact Us Page:

"Connoisseur Carpet cleaning provides the best in Carpet, Tile, and upholstery cleaning to the following areas:"

Upholstery should have a capital U.

Is it possible on the Services Page to move those "Learn More" buttons up so there isn't so much white dead space?

Also.. is the spacing between the last 3 paragraphs supposed to be like that? The first 2 paragraphs are spaced out.

Nice site layout and Instagram Page BTW!

 

[A.J.]

Mighty fine site. Good work. Personally I think the blue mountain image that takes up the whole screen on desktop right away should be half it's size.