Mountain View Carpet Care
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This is going out to 22k homes in Vancouver here. what does it need?
Is that poor kids head to big for his neck to support? J/K
ODIN said:DUDE
WARNING DON'T CALL ANOTHER CLEANER TILL YOU CALL OUR 1 999 NUMBER ON HOUR TO HIRE A CLEANER
MOST THOUROUGH CLEANING EVER OR YOU MONEY BACK
200% GUARANTEE
FREE CARPET AUDIT
FREE BOOTIES
FREE SPOTER
FREE REPORT
WARNING MOST CLEANERS ARE UNSCRUPLOUS MASTABATORS AND WHO KNOW WHAT THEIR DOING IN FRONT OF GRAND MUTHERS PIC
WE WOULD NEVER STEAL THE RIBON CANDY OFF THE LR TABLE
YOUR PANTIES ARE SAFE WITH US!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
rhyde said:I like to be on the cutting edge here’s my tag line
“Our cleaning chemicals won’t kill your family and give your unborn child birth defects like the other guys”
rhyde said:I like to be on the cutting edge here’s my tag line
“Our cleaning chemicals won’t kill your family and give your unborn child birth defects like the other guys”
I agree with Scott. If you're going to spend the money on a mailing..."its" not "it's"
Is "Carpet Cleaning At Its Best" a strong enough distractor to engage the reader? How about "Little Johnny's Smile Says it Best - (insert USP)"
Is the offer strong enough? Not knowing your regular prices I don't know. What matters is what the customer thinks of the value.
Benefits, man, benefits! "Advanced New Truck Mounted Systems" means what to the customer? If you can place "which means" after a statement, you haven't yet found the benefit. I.E.
"Advanced New Truck Mounted Systems": WHICH MEANS ____(benefit)____
"High Power Hot Water Extraction": WHICH MEANS ____(benefit)____
I'd change it to: "Highly Trained Cleaning Technicians" instead of "carpet". Even better I'd say, "Our Professionally Trained Cleaning Technicians Ensure You Always Get Fantastically Clean Carpet!"
The Great Oz said:Forget it. Just use Brian's card with your logo and phone.
Larry B said:[quote="The Great Oz":33mabnor]Forget it. Just use Brian's card with your logo and phone.
Bob ar eyou the one that changed my avitar?Bob Foster said:Note: We are not associated with Checkmate Carpet Cleaning in any way. We don't even have tool belts!