You could have a small pic of each "expert" and just a few words about what they are doing to clean it up.(maybe in two rows) It's toooooo freak'n wordy. Most people just skim and won't read it word for word. With this change It might make it flow better, be more personable and also, a better set up for Important parts like the hook or close (what could be better...)and asking for more vendors.
Having interlink presents and then hosted by interlink, 2 more times right after each other and then, along with the Interlink crew for good measure.Is redundent and more ADHT that Corky after too many shakes and hopped up on pyramid barking. At least get rid of interlink presents to clean up the busy header and maybe an other.
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fest crew... font is hard to read and blends together.
You are paying for color. Put some color behind some of the paragraphs to break it up and highlight the important stuff.
For instance paragraph "We have tons of hands on..." should be highlighted especially since it was important enough to insert into the headline.
Brain storm the feeling you want to convey for the ad: fun, bumping shoulders, comradely, cool stuff, improve your skills, friends, food, new tools, play with stuff.......
Action words help involvement.Discover, learn, touch,inspect,communicate, examine, learn, impact, acquire, master, gain, recieve, intreact,grow...